墨香醉
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成老师
发表于 2025-9-13 16:41:27
欣赏何老师佳作，超赞:victory::victory::victory::victory::victory::victory::victory::victory::victory:
成老师
发表于 2025-9-13 16:42:59
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成老师
发表于 2025-9-13 16:43:31
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成老师
发表于 2025-9-13 16:43:57
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成老师
发表于 2025-9-13 16:44:53
诗歌韵律和谐，节奏感很强，读起来有韵味！
成老师
发表于 2025-9-13 16:45:22
拟人手法运用恰到好处，生动形象！
大美北苑
发表于 2025-9-13 16:50:52
欣赏佳作超赞:victory::victory::victory::victory::victory::victory::victory::victory::victory:
南京的风
发表于 2025-9-13 20:16:48
前后呼应，情景深深。
文明义鸟
发表于 2025-9-14 08:16:56
欣赏学习老师佳作，点赞！