江南吴越 发表于 2026-7-17 10:08:46

晚晴寄怀（二首）

<!----><style type="text/css">html{font-size:375%}</style><link href="https://pics-app.cnyw.net/static/publish/css/style.css?v=20240712" rel="stylesheet" position="1" data-qf-origin="/static/publish/css/style.css?v=20240712"><!--    付费贴-->    <div class="preview_article ">            <!---->    <p>晚晴寄怀</p><p>其一</p><p>晚晴天际绮霞明，</p><p>暮色行人心亦平。</p><p>世路纷纭皆过眼，</p><p>流年澹澹一身清。</p><p>&nbsp;</p><p>其二</p><p>人生风雨饱寒辛，</p><p>日日奔波累此身。</p><p>何必万般谋俗计，</p><p>晚霞赊取度浮尘。</p><p>&nbsp;</p><p>创作自解：</p><p class="">其一布局逻辑：起笔铺展晚晴晚霞实景，以眼前风光为引，由外景带入内心体悟。先绘暮色平和之景，顺势抒发看淡尘俗、心境清净的感慨，层层递进，由外入内，是绝句的「景起情结」写法。</p><p class="">&nbsp;</p><p class="">&nbsp;其二布局逻辑：开篇直抒胸臆，先说半生劳碌辛酸，把心底感慨全盘托出；前三句尽是议论抒怀，末句转出晚霞意象，以一抹暮色美景收束全篇，属于「先议后景、以景结情」。不说尽心中愁绪，借晚霞寄托自宽之意，余味悠长。</p><p class="">&nbsp;</p><p class="qf_image big noneditable" contenteditable="false"><img src="https://pics-app.cnyw.net/forum/20260717100125front2_0_1035910_Fi5gdDwEFea6hgzYokFrCH4CT3Ik.jpg?watermark/1/image/aHR0cDovL3BpY3MtYXBwLmNueXcubmV0L18yMDE5MDQyNTA5MTYwMF81Y2MxMGE1MDc5ZjY2LnBuZw==/dissolve/100/gravity/SouthEast" alt="" width="542" height="360" data-qf-origin="forum/20260717100125front2_0_1035910_Fi5gdDwEFea6hgzYokFrCH4CT3Ik.jpg?watermark/1/image/aHR0cDovL3BpY3MtYXBwLmNueXcubmV0L18yMDE5MDQyNTA5MTYwMF81Y2MxMGE1MDc5ZjY2LnBuZw==/dissolve/100/gravity/SouthEast" /></p><p class="empty_paragraph">&nbsp;</p><p class="qf_image big noneditable" contenteditable="false"><img src="https://pics-app.cnyw.net/forum/20260717100125front2_0_1035910_Fl0LAc1rYCOG7c3bXOrrc6G43Qse.jpg?watermark/1/image/aHR0cDovL3BpY3MtYXBwLmNueXcubmV0L18yMDE5MDQyNTA5MTYwMF81Y2MxMGE1MDc5ZjY2LnBuZw==/dissolve/100/gravity/SouthEast" alt="" width="960" height="1280" data-qf-origin="forum/20260717100125front2_0_1035910_Fl0LAc1rYCOG7c3bXOrrc6G43Qse.jpg?watermark/1/image/aHR0cDovL3BpY3MtYXBwLmNueXcubmV0L18yMDE5MDQyNTA5MTYwMF81Y2MxMGE1MDc5ZjY2LnBuZw==/dissolve/100/gravity/SouthEast" /></p><p>&nbsp;</p>    <!----></div>            

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